Saturday 29 October 2011

But its, THEY.


They ventured a walk
After they parked the car at FMS
In her black pyjamas and slippers
She would still look the best

The chill in the wind
Made her nose go red
He looked at her and smiled
Her cheeks he caressed

Winter promised its arrival
He held her waist under the moon
The stars dimmed their lights
The walk promised unison

They walked back towards the car
He held her face in his palms
As Bryan Adams promised his love
Their breathes fastened
She felt the warmth of his breath
On her neck, on her cheeks
Her lips quivered in ecstasy
As he got nearer and kissed

They saw a decade together
The blankets were forever warm
The naps were always a pretext
To trigger the love that blossomed
And it’s another winter again
They still sit in the blue Zen getting cosy
They still find all pretexts
They still go for drives till late
The only difference being, it’s now THEY.



28 comments:

  1. Aw aw aw. Ain't you cute, black pajamas and slippers girl?
    And both your display picture and this one are of the beach. Someone's having good fun, eh?
    This was beautiful. Seductive, admirable and yes, CUTE. You're too saweeet. I'm going to need medicines now. >_<

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  2. Thanks Darling! And yea, went to Mumbai, these are from then :) been a couple of months!
    And sun, i did not get any message on facebook? :s

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  3. In her black pyjamas and slippers
    She would still look the best

    cute.

    The chill in the wind
    Made her nose go read: RED. and LOL.
    He looked at her and smiled
    Her cheeks he caressed

    lovely. :)

    Winter promised its arrival
    He held her waist under the moon
    The stars dimmed their lights
    The walk promised unison.

    trust me. i am gonna interrogate u on gtalk. too cute. :P

    She felt the warmth of his breath
    On her neck, on her cheeks
    Her lips quivered in ecstasy
    As he got nearer and kissed. i couldn't have done it better myself. *humble bow in awe*

    They saw a decade together
    forsaw! so true. dreaming already.

    The naps were always a pretext
    To trigger the love that blossomed. marvellous.

    loved it.
    as usual :P

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  4. Oh shit! thanks thanks, i will just rectify that :P
    And thank you, for being ever so generous! But none of you perhaps got it right? Its no more they but THEY. :/
    you have to say sad things guys :P

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  5. i liked the concept....i liked the rhyming..i liked the cohesive structure...i liked the pics.....i liked everything about this poem....good job done!!:-)

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  6. she missed him d dayz when sum pretxt served to tk him away from her, just as when sumone misses the sun on a cloudy grey winter day without having thought much about d sun wen it was shining... 'or may be today its not her or its about him' coz today.. they are just "they"

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  7. Raj suggested your blog to me. And that's how I am here :)

    I love the way you write.. The descriptions are lovely and they easily create pictures :)

    The picture is also beautiful :)

    Take Care!

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  8. lovely!

    the description brought alive the flow in you poem:)

    keep writing...

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  9. You write amazing, i love your blog :D

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  10. Awesome poem.
    Awwww-ish ! :D
    And, wow! You are sooo pretty! :O

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  11. Thanka Anu! :*
    But a lil less pretty than you are :) :) :*

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  12. *teary eyed* Hugs.
    This one is so touchy! The best thing about this one...truth!
    :*

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  13. *huggiee* darling! And nothing in comparison to what you write! :)

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  14. u beautifully injected venomous dose of emotions through the line whose words physically appear bolder than the rest:)

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  15. Thanks Shivam! I am glad you received what exactly i meant to deliver :)

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  16. Awwh! This is like the cutest thing I've read all day! <3:)

    P.S. Your picture is so pretty! :)

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  17. hello ,
    crystal talks a lot about you, visiting you for the 1st time..... and this is an awwwsome visit and i loved the poem and the last line it actually hits your heart instantly ...
    KHOOBSOORAT is the word i use often, but the intensity of the word remains the same...
    its a sweet poem without calories .... like sugar free natura :P

    p.s- looking stunning in the pix..! :)

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  18. Thanks a lot Suvaiba! And crystal is a sweetheart! I am so glad to see you here :) :)
    Thanks again :*

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  19. First things first, You are beautiful :) And now I'll go back to read the post :)

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  20. Winter promised its arrival
    He held her waist under the moon
    The stars dimmed their lights
    The walk promised unison

    Love all around :)

    I know we are supposed to say sad things here :D (I read the comments above) but this poem just got its way into my heart, I can't be sad :)

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  21. Serendipity: Thanks a lot! And i am glad it made its way to your heart. That is all i want :)
    Thanks so much re!

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  22. It's a wonderful moment when we realise that she and he have become them, so wonderful that it has to be felt for oneself.
    You have done a pretty nice job of capturing it in words:)

    And the picture is you?! OMG I seem to stumble across the blogs of the most beautiful bloggers and giving myself SUCHA complex:D

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  23. Thanks so much Peevee :)
    Yea, thats me and now I guess i have officially become synonymous to tomato now. I have been blushing so much. You guys are just so kind :) :)

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